Wednesday, September 19, 2012

Peer Review Session

My peer review session went great. I got good and bad feedback, in order to help me create the best paper that I can. While my paper is FAR from perfect, she did mention that my organization was solid, this is something that I will keep the same. Organization is important to me, so I tend yo put emphasis on it when I'm writing. My draft falls short in several aspects, however. Analysis in some sections could be more exsistant, my persona stories and how I have changed have to be expanded. This personal narrative is not so personal, yet. Apparently my paper is funny, but the funny parts are minimal. An expansion of that would also help my reader stay interested in my paper. My main focus right now is getting the audience hooked, the beginning of my story is a bit of a bore.
Overall, my paper is well developed, it just needs some critical thinking added in.

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