My Introduction:
I hate my introdcution. I am really bad at getting and keeping the readers attention when starting a paper. I really do not have an effective audience grabber, which is something I need to work on. I start my introdcution by making a general claim about the norms and taboos of my culture, but instead I should relate these norms and taboos to a personal or hypothetical story. I have a thesis statement, which isn't exactly necessary for this type of paper, but I think it gives the reader an idea of what I am going to address, and therefore it helps them understand what kind of mind frame to be in when readin gmy paper. My paper is progressional in that I tell a story of how my tatse i nmovies have changed and how that has changed my idea of love and relationships. My introduction works with my progressional style paper, but it just does not get the readers attention.
My Conclusion:
I really like my conclusion, I think that it gives a good summary as to what all my main points in my paper were, and I think it also makes the reader think about their idea of relationships and love and how they really are not fairytales. My last sentence is my favorite sentence in the entire paper, for it concludes everything that the paper is trying to say. While my stance on media changed from the beginning to the end of the paper, my tone does not change too much, which I think makes my conclusion even more effective. I believe that the 'so what' part of my paper is answered, the reader gets to reflect on how their idea of love has changed with time. Overall my conclusion is effective, in my opinion, and it summarizes the paper well.
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