Paper Feedback

Paper Feedback:
My analysis of the first main point and my last main point are solid, the middle is a little blurry, though. I definitely need to work on the analysis as to how my view of the world changed as my taste in movies changed as a middle shcooler. I just need to disect my midle school years, refresh my memory as to what Lizzie McGuire had to do with who I am today. My introduction is a little "disjointed", I need to find a way to get my thesis across in an organized manner, and actually talk about all the points in my thesis. For exmaple, Glee. I never actually mention Glee in the body of my paper, even though it really has changed my view of myself and the world. The introduction of Gkee will take my paper to a new undiscussed area. Also, another BIG problem is my personal view rather than a global view, this is the forst paper I've really written in regards to how something has changed me personally, rather than how it has changed the world as a whole. Personal reflection is the key to writing this paper successfully.