Wednesday, October 31, 2012
Seventeen Magazine Advertisment
Seventeen magazine is aimed for an audience of teenage girls, from roughly 15 to 20; that being said it is filled with clothing, make up, pretty girls, cute guys,etc. all to appeal to their young readers. One ad in this magazine is a Neutrogena ad, and this is aiming to show girls that by looking pretty and using Neitrogena products you can change the world. The first piece of text you see is "Making a Difference in the World Is... Pretty Amazing!", underneath this caption ais a photograph of several pretty girls that are shown using specific Neutrogena products such as their face wash, lip gloss, and mascara. Neutrogena is hosting a Seventeen Pretty Amazing contest, which is looking for a girl that can change the world. This ad was shown twice in the first six pages, and I'm sure it is elsewhere in this edition and several other editions of Seventeen Magazine. The girls in this ad are all very pretty, and the ad makes it seem as if it is due to the Neutrogena products, making girls want to go out and buy Nuetrogena products in order to change the world and be beautiful. This ad has ethos for Neutrogena is a very well known company that is advertised everywhere; it also appeals to the readers emotions, for example a young girl who might have low self esteem could see this ad and think that they could be beautiful and change the world just like these six girls shown on the red carpet. At the end of the day, just because you buy Neutrogena products doe not mean that Seveneteen magazine is going to give you a red carpet make over.
Monday, October 29, 2012
Free Writing
First Draft
Dear Mom,
I knwo we just spoke last night, but I thought I'd put my pen and paper to good use and show you that I really am doing things in college. Phone calls are great and everything, but everyone loves getting mail. I have the strangest story to tell you, so sit down. Last night my friends and I decided to go out and have some fun. Being college students, we are naturally careless and free, not considering the consequences to any of our actions; not to mention it was halloween night so we were ready to party!
We went to the local haunted house and the craziest things happened! We were chased by lions, and tigers, and bears! This haunted house was a real haunted house; this was not one of those fake houses that some low life with too much time on their hands decorated with the halloween spirit. No. This was Mrs. Jenkins house. She died in 1945, due to natural causes, so they say. She was a zoo keeper, and she kept lions, tigers, and bears trapped in her basement. All of her kids died in very strange circumstances, one was pushed down a well, the other was chopped up by an ax... to be continued.
Revised Draft
Dear Mommy,
I know we just spoke last night, but I thought I'd put my pen and paper to good use and show you that college is teaching me more thanhow to party and play beer pong. Phone calls are great and everything, but everyone loves getting mail. I have the strangest story to tell you, so sit down. Last night my friends and I decided to go out and have some fun. Being college students, we are naturally careless and free, not considering the consequences to any of our actions; not to mention it was halloween night so we were ready to party! We went to the local haunted house and the craziest things happened! We were chased by lions, tigers, bears, and an old lady with an ax! This haunted house was a real haunted house; this was not one of those fake houses that some low life with too much time on their hands decorated due to an excess of halloween spirit. No. This was Mrs. Jenkins' house. She died in 1945, due to natural causes, so they say. She was a zoo keeper, and she kept lions, tigers, and bears trapped in her basement; I thought it was odd at first too, but you know people in Tallahassee are odd anyways. All of her kids died in very strange circumstances, one was pushed down a well, the other was chopped up by an ax, needless to say they were all murdered in mysterious ways... to be continued.
1) Do I care about this subject?
I mean I care about telling my mother about my day, and the strange happenings that I endure in this crazy college town.
2) Don't Ramble.
I didn't really even finish, so there's no room for rambling.
3) Keep it simple.
I don't have many complex sentences, sure things are there to fluff it a bit, but what story doesn't have a bit of fluff?
4) Cut.
See revised version.
5) Sound like myself.
I call my mom, mommy still. I should change that.
6) Say what you mean to say.
I was working on getting to the point of the story, what i want to say is not on there yet.
7) Pity the readers.
It is fairly easy to read.
Dear Mom,
I knwo we just spoke last night, but I thought I'd put my pen and paper to good use and show you that I really am doing things in college. Phone calls are great and everything, but everyone loves getting mail. I have the strangest story to tell you, so sit down. Last night my friends and I decided to go out and have some fun. Being college students, we are naturally careless and free, not considering the consequences to any of our actions; not to mention it was halloween night so we were ready to party!
We went to the local haunted house and the craziest things happened! We were chased by lions, and tigers, and bears! This haunted house was a real haunted house; this was not one of those fake houses that some low life with too much time on their hands decorated with the halloween spirit. No. This was Mrs. Jenkins house. She died in 1945, due to natural causes, so they say. She was a zoo keeper, and she kept lions, tigers, and bears trapped in her basement. All of her kids died in very strange circumstances, one was pushed down a well, the other was chopped up by an ax... to be continued.
Revised Draft
Dear Mommy,
I know we just spoke last night, but I thought I'd put my pen and paper to good use and show you that college is teaching me more thanhow to party and play beer pong. Phone calls are great and everything, but everyone loves getting mail. I have the strangest story to tell you, so sit down. Last night my friends and I decided to go out and have some fun. Being college students, we are naturally careless and free, not considering the consequences to any of our actions; not to mention it was halloween night so we were ready to party! We went to the local haunted house and the craziest things happened! We were chased by lions, tigers, bears, and an old lady with an ax! This haunted house was a real haunted house; this was not one of those fake houses that some low life with too much time on their hands decorated due to an excess of halloween spirit. No. This was Mrs. Jenkins' house. She died in 1945, due to natural causes, so they say. She was a zoo keeper, and she kept lions, tigers, and bears trapped in her basement; I thought it was odd at first too, but you know people in Tallahassee are odd anyways. All of her kids died in very strange circumstances, one was pushed down a well, the other was chopped up by an ax, needless to say they were all murdered in mysterious ways... to be continued.
1) Do I care about this subject?
I mean I care about telling my mother about my day, and the strange happenings that I endure in this crazy college town.
2) Don't Ramble.
I didn't really even finish, so there's no room for rambling.
3) Keep it simple.
I don't have many complex sentences, sure things are there to fluff it a bit, but what story doesn't have a bit of fluff?
4) Cut.
See revised version.
5) Sound like myself.
I call my mom, mommy still. I should change that.
6) Say what you mean to say.
I was working on getting to the point of the story, what i want to say is not on there yet.
7) Pity the readers.
It is fairly easy to read.
Monday, October 15, 2012
Cinderella
Once upon a time in a college far far away, lived a young college freshman named Cinderella. Cinderella lived in a dorm on campus, and she had two evil roommates; they constantly lock her out of the room, they leave a mess all over the place, they forget to unlock the bathroom. Needless to say, they're very messy and rude, and have no consideration for Cinderella. One day there was a homecoming dance, and Cinderella desperately wanted to go. As she was getting ready, she noticed that her roommate took her dress. Cinderella was in tears! She was convinced that she could not go to the dance, and she cried in her room. Her RA over heard her crying, and came to see what was wrong. When she heard Cinderella's story, she offered to let her borrow one of her dresses and a pair of shoes. Her RA reminded her that she had to be back by 12:00 am, due to her 8:00 am class the next day.
Cinderella arrives at the dance and meets her prince charming, an upper classmen who plays football and is the homecoming king. Cinderella isn't the only girl after Prince Charimg, all of the other freshmen were competing for his attention. He danced with Cinderella all night. All of a sudden she heard the bell, and she realized that it was 12:00 and she had to run home. CInderella got all the way back to her dorm, and she realized that she forgot her student ID, and her name was worn off so she knew that she would never find it. Prince Charming found the ID, but he couldn't idenitfy her, he only knew what dorm she lived in. For weeks he searched every room in her dorm, until he finally found her! And they lived happily ever after.
Cinderella arrives at the dance and meets her prince charming, an upper classmen who plays football and is the homecoming king. Cinderella isn't the only girl after Prince Charimg, all of the other freshmen were competing for his attention. He danced with Cinderella all night. All of a sudden she heard the bell, and she realized that it was 12:00 and she had to run home. CInderella got all the way back to her dorm, and she realized that she forgot her student ID, and her name was worn off so she knew that she would never find it. Prince Charming found the ID, but he couldn't idenitfy her, he only knew what dorm she lived in. For weeks he searched every room in her dorm, until he finally found her! And they lived happily ever after.
Friday, October 5, 2012
Starry Night
Tupac's excerpt is actually written to Van Gogh, but group 2 (the best group ever) noticed that it could have been written about God. The painting looks like it is from the perspective of a deity, in the poem Tupac addresses Van Gogh but it could easily be conveyed as from God, rather than Van Gogh. From lines 11 and 12 "So on that starry night
you gave to us
You don't know what you've got until it's gone.
Wednesday, October 3, 2012
Visual/Textual Interaction: Peer Review
My paper is going to be about the King of Pop, Michael Jackson, and how his music and charities conveyed an image to the public that was never really emphasized before. MJ changed many racial barriers with his music, he changed MTV drastically, and he gave more money to charaties than any other celebrity has. I picked Michael Jackson because his music changed the world, and his actions as a celebrity deviated from many celebrities of his time, and ours. I plan on going in a sort of chronological order, and taking specific incidents in his life and showing how that impacted the culture. I also plan on analyzing a photo and a couple quotes from him that convey his message of change and giving back to the community. Kole, my peer asked me what exactly I planned on analyzing, and I want to analyze his message and his values as a black, male artist who was crucially criticized by the public, and why giving back to the community was so important to him. The message that MJ gives me is probably different than what he portrays to others, but he did a lot of good things in his life and it has impacted todays culture.
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